OK, you might be thinking “Hey he’s cheating! He posting another story” In a way you would be correct too, at least about the story (Haley didn’t actually say “just one story per person”, so I’d have to ask for a ruling on if I was cheating or not) because this is my second offering to her April Flash Fiction Challenge . In my defence, you will notice that this story is posted on the “Fictional Campfire” and not “OS040”.
This challenge has really turned me around on fiction writing, and I thank Haley for bringing it to “Soldiering Through The Writing World” I haven’t been able to read all the stories linked back to the challenge yet, but the ones that I have are truly amazing. Wow, guys! My last story was a bit dark, so I thought I would take a shot at a more up beat one this time.
The Gun on the Desk
She had been warned, but now it was too late. The spray of water played across Sam and her classmates!
Sam had entered the classroom with dread. The her class was due to start writing short stories, and she was NOT looking forward to it. It wasn’t that Samantha didn’t like writing, in fact she desperately wanted to be an author one day. She just didn’t want the rest of the class to know that.
As the period bell sounded, Mr Hazard walked into the room carrying a “Ultrasoaker 1000” water blaster. This was immediately noticed by the trouble makers hiding in the back.
“Yo, cool gun there Mr. H” piped up Derek “who did ya take it from!”
As he placed the water gun down on his desk, Mr Hazard just smiled. Perching himself on the corner of the desk he got right into it.
“OK, guys. You too Derek” he said to laughter “who here knows how to write a story?”
Sam really wanted to put up her hand. She had three binders full of stories, but she remained silent. Derek answered for the class.
“Me!” he stated proudly “once upon a time, the end”
“Not bad Derek, but you might want to add a few things to it.” Mr. H chuckled “like maybe a setting. Anybody know what that is?”
This time Sam spoke “It’s where a story takes place. It’s the world the author creates by describing it to us.”
“Very good!” he smiled ” Today I want everybody to work on creating a setting. It can be anywhere you like, include good detail, but remember that anything you describe must be functional to the story. My english teacher use to say if you describe a gun, it must go off by the end of the story. Let’s go.”
But Derek wasn’t quite ready to get working yet. “Mr H, how about you give us an example, just so we know what you’re looking for huh?”
It seemed to Sam that Mr Hazard had been waiting for that question ” OK, how about this example – Mr Hazard taught grade 10 english in classroom 125. The class was filled with remarkably creative students, and a guy named Derek. It was a plain classroom, rather boring in fact. The only notable item in the classroom at all was the “Ultrasoaker 1000″ water blaster laying on the teacher’s desk. The end! – So Derek, that any help to you?” Mr Hazard asked as he turned his back to the class and bent over his desk.
It was then that something had occurred to Sam ” Excuse me, didn’t you say that your teacher said if you describe a gun, it has to go off by the end of the story. You just said The End, but you didn’t say anything about the gun going off.”
When Mr Hazard turned around holding the water blaster and smiling, Sam realized that she had just made a mistake!